What was the most memorable vacation you ever had? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think this vacation will be the most memorable vacation I\'ve ever had. Before I go to America as an exchange student, I want to send much time with my family. But, I have to stay in Seoul because of the vacation class. I must take classes even during vacation to graduate the university. I am missing my family and that makes me call to my family everyday. Also, I couldn\'t meet my friends well during last semester. I took one semester off so I just stayed at my hometown. Furthermore, my friends in hometown were not in there due to the university and I only stayed at home because of my puppy. I really loved time with my puppy, Maru. Therefore, I will try to spend time with my friends having lunch or dinner. My calendar is full of schedules even now. Preparing to go to abroad, I am really worried that I can adapt to new life and become independent. However, I want to believe myself that I can do and I will do best to spend time with my people before I leave.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Mary! Thank you for finishing your homework. I also believe that you can finish your exchange student period in America terrifically! Take care!-Faith-
I think this vacation will be the most memorable vacation I\'ve ever had.
>> I think this vacation will be the most memorable vacation I will ever had.
Before I go to America as an exchange student, I want to send much time with my family.
>> Before I go to America as an exchange student, I want to spend much time with my family.
But, I have to stay in Seoul because of the vacation class.
>> However, I have to stay in Seoul because of the vacation class.
I must take classes even during vacation to graduate the university.
>> I must take classes even during vacation to graduate from the university.
I am missing my family and that makes me call to my family everyday.
>> I am missing my family and that makes me call them every day.
Also, I couldn\'t meet my friends well during last semester.
>> Also, I could not meet my friends well last semester.
I took one semester off so I just stayed at my hometown.
>> I took one semester off, so I just stayed in my hometown.
Furthermore, my friends in hometown were not in there due to the university and I only stayed at home because of my puppy.
>> Furthermore, my friends in my hometown were not there due to their studies in university, and I only stayed at home because of my puppy.
I really loved time with my puppy, Maru.
>> I really love my time with my puppy, Maru.
Therefore, I will try to spend time with my friends having lunch or dinner.
>> CORRECT
OR Therefore, I will try to spend time with my friends at lunchtime or dinnertime.
My calendar is full of schedules even now.
>> My calendar has full schedule even now.
OR I have a tight schedule these days.
Preparing to go to abroad, I am really worried that I can adapt to new life and become independent.
>> As I am preparing to go abroad, I am really worried if I can easily adapt to my new life and become independent.
However, I want to believe myself that I can do and I will do best to spend time with my people before I leave.
>> However, I want to believe in myself that I can do it and I will do my best to spend time with my loved ones before I leave.
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