What was the single most challenging thing that happened to you last year?

2015-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

I am not sure whether it was fortunate or not for me to have uneventful 2014. It was a quiet year, although I had to undergone a vein surgery in my legs.It was my first operation that made me stay in the hospital for two days and put me under general anesthesia.The surgery seems to be relatively a minor one compared with other serious operations, however, it was painful physically and mentally to me and I have suffered a lot due to the long recovery time during which I never had a good night sleep due to itch and the urinary problem.At work, it was a bit disappointing because we failed to achieve our annual sales targets in spite of all the effort and substantial amount of money spent on marketing and sales promotions. Now reflecting on 2014, I was a bit lazy and not fully determined in making concrete plans for the year when I started 2014. I should have made commitment with a strong will to achieve my goals. Building a good relationship with my co-workers was a challenging thing.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sir [이름]!
Thank you for doing your essay. Keep it up! Oh don\'t worry about the past.
Let us focus on the present and the future. I know you do have some plans this year.
We should be really determined to reach our goal and let us take it one step at a time.
Believe in yourself and your abilities. Take care!
Teacher Nina

I am not sure whether it was fortunate or not for me to have uneventful 2014.
>> correct
>> OR: I am not sure whether I was fortunate or not to have uneventful 2014.
It was a quiet year, although I had to undergone a vein surgery in my legs.
>> correct
>> OR: It was a quiet year, although I had to undergone a minor operation.
It was my first operation that made me stay in the hospital for two days and put me under general anesthesia.
>> correct
The surgery seems to be relatively a minor one compared with other serious operations, however, it was painful physically and mentally to me and I have suffered a lot due to the long recovery time during which I never had a good night sleep due to itch and the urinary problem.
>> correct
>> OR:The surgery seems to be relatively a minor one compared with other serious operations, however, it was painful physically and mentally to me. I have suffered a lot due to the long recovery time during which I never had a good night sleep due to the itch and urinary problem.
At work, it was a bit disappointing because we failed to achieve our annual sales targets in spite of all the effort and substantial amount of money spent on marketing and sales promotions.
>> correct
Now reflecting on 2014, I was a bit lazy and not fully determined in making concrete plans for the year when I started 2014.
>> correct
>> OR: Now reflecting on 2014, I was a bit lazy and not fully determined in making concrete plans when I started the year.
I should have made commitment with a strong will to achieve my goals.
>> correct
Building a good relationship with my co-workers was a challenging thing.
>> correct

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