What was the worse illness you had and how did you recover?
학생이 쓴 원문
Except for disks, I had enteritis and gastritis last year. At that time I got two diseases from drinking too much because It\'s when I came back from the army. so i had to hang out with my friends who living in a Busan and university. But I felt my health was getting worse even if I wanted to drink with my friends. Therefore, I stopped drinking ant more and exercised for my health. As a result, I\'m as healthy as anyone else right now.
강사 첨삭
I didn\'t know you had these problems before too. I am happy you got over it.
>> Aside my shoulders disks, I had enteritis and gastritis last year.
At that time I got two diseases from drinking too much because It\'s when I came back from the army.
>> At that time, I got two diseases from drinking too much because it\'s when I came back from the army.
so i had to hang out with my friends who living in a Busan and university.
>> So, I had to hang out with my friends who were living in Busan and around in my University.
But I felt my health was getting worse even if I wanted to drink with my friends.
>> But, I felt that my health was getting worse even if I wanted to drink with my friends.
Therefore, I stopped drinking ant more and exercised for my health.
>> Therefore, I stopped drinking and exercised for my health.
As a result, I\'m as healthy as anyone else right now.
>> As a result, I\'m as healthy as everyone else right now.
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