What was you best service that you gave?

2017-11-13 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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What was you best service that you gave? At my previous job a group of people who are in a wheelchair visited to theater to watch movie and they want to buy popcorns and sodas. but our counter is too high to see the menu and receive the food for them. so I go out to the counter with the menu and take their order one bye one. they are 5 members so i can remember what they want for each. and then after the foods come out I gave a popcorns and soda to each other. they look so happy and someone give me a chocolate meaning of thanks. I am also happy to see they smiling face and after that I put a menu on the bottom for the handicapped person.

강사 첨삭

Hi Trinity!

This is another impressive side to your personality.

I love getting to know you more through your writing.

You did a good job.

Keep expressing your ideas.

~~ Teacher Sharon

At my previous job a group of people who are in a wheelchair visited to theater to watch movie and they want to buy popcorns and sodas.

>> In my previous job, a group of people in wheelchairs visited the theater to watch a movie and they wanted to buy popcorn and soda.

but our counter is too high to see the menu and receive the food for them.

>> However, our counter was too high for them to see the menu and get their order. 

so I go out to the counter with the menu and take their order one bye one.

>> I went out of the counter with the menu and took their orders one by one.

they are 5 members so i can remember what they want for each.

>> There were 5 people and I tried to remember what each person wanted.

and then after the foods come out I gave a popcorns and soda to each other.

>> After the food was ready, I gave their order individually.

 they look so happy and someone give me a chocolate meaning of thanks.

>> They looked so happy and someone gave me chocolate to express her gratitude.

 I am also happy to see they smiling face and after that I put a menu on the bottom for the handicapped person.

>> I was also happy to see their smiling faces and after that incident, I placed a menu at the bottom of the counter for the handicapped.

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