What was your best travel experience so far?
학생이 쓴 원문
When i recalled which i was in swimming pool of a Hotel’s room with my friends who are working on hospital like me. i desire going back to there. Even though it was 3years ago, i can’t forget it. At the time, we can rest comfortably, watched TV, cooked, swam and even enjoyed a spa. How we can find the a best place, we wanted to leave for a while in hospital. So i searched as ‘a room what it has all’ then, i tracked where it is. Finally i found which was composed of swimming pool, spa, and fundamental tools. I noticed to my friends that we must go on. And they agreed right now and we could leave after 3days. Even if we didn’t have enough money and any plan, but it was a invaluable time for us. Sometimes, when we have a chat, we used to refer to the old memorize.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름] [이름]!^^
Thank you for sharing your weekend plan with your friends. I am sure that it is going to be fun and exciting at the same time. Have the best time with your friends!^^
Always,
~Kelly^^
When i recalled which i was in swimming pool of a Hotel’s room with my friends who are working on hospital like me. >> I remembered a time when my friends from the hospital and I were swimming in a hotel.
i desire going back to there.
>> I desire to go back there.
Even though it was 3years ago, i can’t forget it.
>> Even though it happened three (3) years ago, I can’t forget it.
At the time, we can rest comfortably, watched TV, cooked, swam and even enjoyed a spa.
>> At the time, we could rest comfortably. We also watched TV, cooked, swam and even enjoyed a spa.
How we can find the a best place, we wanted to leave for a while in hospital.
>> How can we find the best place for a weekend getaway?
So i searched as ‘a room what it has all’ then, i tracked where it is.
>> So, I searched some places that has all the facilities and amenities that we need.
Finally i found which was composed of swimming pool, spa, and fundamental tools.
>> Finally, I found a place that has a swimming pool, a spa, and other facilities.
I noticed to my friends that we must go on.
>> I relayed this to my friends and encouraged them to go there.
And they agreed right now and we could leave after 3days.
>> They all agreed to go there in three days.
Even if we didn’t have enough money and any plan, but it was a invaluable time for us.
>> Even if we don\'t have enough money, it will be a [이름]derful time for all of us.
Sometimes, when we have a chat, we used to refer to the old memorize.
>> Sometimes, when we chat, we reminisce our fondest memories.
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