What was your best trip?
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My best trip is Tokyo. When I was a senior in University. I absented my last class and I went to the Japan alone.
It was a start day in summer vacation. So I wanted to leave right away. I worked part time job in a cafe to get travel money. And that\'s my first trip on myself and alone.
First day, it was little bit scared but I adjusted in Japan.
Actually, Japan is similar to Korea. They know Korean so it was convenient to stay there.
What I was looking forward to the most is the aquarium.
I like sea creature. My favorite animal is jellyfish. I saw many kinds of jellyfish. And I bought a jellyfish doll at the gift shop.
And then, I arounded streets and playground, I saw the comic books in the bookstore. I went to the beef restaurant. And ate sushi.Iit was unforgettable trip for me. I get a confidence to go another country. Japan is close that can be go any time. That is the most benefit. I will go one more this year.
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My best trip is Tokyo. When I was a senior in University.
>>My best trip is in Tokyo when I was a senior university student.
I absented my last class and I went to the Japan alone.
>> I was absent from my class and went to Japan alone.
It was a start day in summer vacation.
It was a start day in summer vacation.
>>It was the first day of summer vacation.
So I wanted to leave right away.
>> Correct.
I worked part time job in a cafe to get travel money.
>> I worked part-time in a cafe to get some travel money.
And that\'s my first trip on myself and alone.
>>And that\'s my first trip with myself alone.
First day, it was little bit scared but I adjusted in Japan.
First day, it was little bit scared but I adjusted in Japan.
>>On the first day, it was a little bit scary but I adjusted myself in Japan.
Actually, Japan is similar to Korea.
Actually, Japan is similar to Korea.
>>Correct.
They know Korean so it was convenient to stay there.
>> You know that Korea is convenient to stay in.
What I was looking forward to the most is the aquarium.
What I was looking forward to the most is the aquarium.
>>Correct.
I like sea creature.
I like sea creature.
>>I like sea creatures.
My favorite animal is jellyfish.
>>My favorite animal is the jellyfish.
I saw many kinds of jellyfish.
>>Correct.
And I bought a jellyfish doll at the gift shop.
>>Correct.
And then, I arounded streets and playground, I saw the comic books in the bookstore.
>>And then, I went around the streets and the playground. I saw some comic books in the bookstore.
I went to the beef restaurant.
>> Correct.
>> OR: I went to a beef restaurant.
And ate sushi.Iit was unforgettable trip for me.
>>And I ate sushi. It was an unforgettable trip for me.
I get a confidence to go another country.
>> I got confidence going to another country.
Japan is close that can be go any time.
>>Japan is close to our country so I can go there anytime.
That is the most benefit.
>>That is the benefit of it.
I will go one more this year.
>>I will go there one more time this year.
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