What was your dream job when you were young?
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name],
When I was young, My dream job that I want to be was a broadcaster. I think it was just my idea. When I went to the University, I knew, it was very difficult to achieve the job. There was no older alumnus to achieve this job in my university. so I didn\'t know how to do to get the job and there was no person to ask about this. so I gave up this job and I tried to look for my job that I can do well and I found it.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
I hope your day day was wonderful! See you next week ^^
Dear [Name],
When I was young, My dream job that I want to be was a broadcaster.
>> When I was young, my dream job was to be a broadcaster.
I think it was just my idea.
>> I think it was just what I want.
When I went to the University, I knew, it was very difficult to achieve the job.
>> When I went to the University, I knew, it was very difficult to achieve that kind of job.
There was no older alumnus to achieve this job in my university.
>> There was no other graduate in my university that achieve this kind of job.
so I didn\'t know how to do to get the job and there was no person to ask about this. so I gave up this job and I tried to look for my job that I can do well and I found it.
>> I didn\'t know what to do to get that job and there was no other people interested about broadcasting so I gave up and I tried to look for a job that I can perfrom well and I luckily found it.
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