What was your dream job when you were young?

2022-06-28 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

학생이 쓴 원문

When I was young, I wanted to work for government office. I was born and raised in the countryside. I was envy someone who lived in neighberhood and got a job where she worked for government. So I had dreamed to be a official since I saw her. I ended up grew up to be a official.

강사 첨삭

Well done, Angel! I would like to congratulate you not only for this wonderful homework but also for achieving your dream job. You are incredible!-Faith-
When I was young, I wanted to work for government office. 
>> When I was young, I wanted to work for a government office. 
I was born and raised in the countryside. 
>> CORRECT
I was envy someone who lived in neighberhood and got a job where she worked for government. 
>> I envied someone who lived in our neighborhood and got a job for the government. 
So I had dreamed to be a official since I saw her. 
>> So, I had dreamed to be a government official since I saw her.
I ended up grew up to be a official.
>> Consequently, I ended up being one.

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