What was your greatest changes in your life?

2021-03-24 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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I joined R.O.T.C. at junior in university. As you know, it means reserve officer training corps. It is a obligation to have a military service to every Korean young men. There is a three method to be a military officer. I chose ROTC to be a officer as a military service. In university, I should master a military training for 8 hours a week besides my major curriculum from junior to senior. After be a officer, I learned many thing like leadership and responsibility. It was helpful tools to manage my life.

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Hi Sir [이름]! Thank you for taking time in answering the question. Here are some of the corrections, but other than that, you really did great. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

I joined R.O.T.C. at junior in university. 
>> When I was a junior in the university, I joined the R.O.T.C. 

As you know, it means reserve officer training corps.
>> As you know, ROTC stands for \"Reserve Officer Training Corps\".

It is a obligation to have a military service to every Korean young men. 
>> It is an obligation for Korean men to join the military.

There is a three method to be a military officer.
>> There are three methods of becoming a military officer.

I chose ROTC to be a officer as a military service.
>> I chose to be an officer in ROTC.

In university, I should master a military training for 8 hours a week besides my major curriculum from junior to senior.
>> In the university, I should train for 8 hours a week aside from studying my major, which is a curriculum from junior to senior.

After be a officer, I learned many thing like leadership and responsibility. 
>> After being an officer, I learned many things like leadership and taking full responsibility.
 
It was helpful tools to manage my life.
>> It was a helpful tool in managing my life.

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