What was your memorable birthday?
학생이 쓴 원문
My memorable birthday was an experience of being celebrated unexpectedly.
It happened when I was in elementary school and high school student.
When I was in elementary school student, my mother invited my classmates to a birthday party without my knowledge, and when I was in high school, my friends secretly decorated the empty classroom and gave me my favorite things as gifts instead of chocolate pie.
I was so happy at that time that I cried like a child in front of my friends. HAHAHA. :)
My personal wish is that next year\'s birthday will be memorable.
I hope I can get a job through an interview this year, and as an office worker working next year, I hope my family and friends celebrate my birthday.
I hope my wish comes true.
강사 첨삭
Happy Birthday, [이름]!!!
It\'s nice to be celebrated by your loved ones, especially when they make an effort to surprise you on your special day. I used to surprise other people on their special days, but I have to admit that I have never experienced the same level of thoughtfulness. For this reason, I want to meet someone who is just like me, hahaha kidding~ but on your birthday, I hope you become more self-assured in whatever you do, acquire more skills and understanding, and develop a strong will and optimistic outlook to handle any challenges life presents. Have a blast on your birthday ^__________^
Chammy
My memorable birthday was an experience of being celebrated unexpectedly.
>>Correct
It happened when I was in elementary school and high school student.
It happened when I was in elementary school and high school student.
>> It happened when I was in elementary school as well as in high school.
When I was in elementary school student, my mother invited my classmates to a birthday party without my knowledge, and when I was in high school, my friends secretly decorated the empty classroom and gave me my favorite things as gifts instead of chocolate pie.
> When I was an elementary school student, my mother invited my classmates to my birthday party without my knowledge, and when I was in high school, my friends secretly decorated the empty classroom and gave me my favorite things as gifts instead of chocolate pie.
I was so happy at that time that I cried like a child in front of my friends. HAHAHA. :)
>>Correct
My personal wish is that next year\'s birthday will be memorable.
My personal wish is that next year\'s birthday will be memorable.
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>> I wish my next birthday will be more memorable.
I hope I can get a job through an interview this year, and as an office worker working next year, I hope my family and friends celebrate my birthday.
I hope my wish comes true.
I hope my wish comes true.
OR
>> This year, I wish to secure a job after an interview. Next year, I hope to work at an office and have my birthday celebrated by my loved ones.
I hope my wish is fulfilled.파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.