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The picnics in the Newzealand were the most memorable picnic experiences for me. When I was sixteen, I had a opportunity to stay in Newzealand for two months. I did home stay in one Newzealand family at that time, and homestay parents took me to the picnic with two other famies. I was very happy because I had never went to the picnic for the moment. Where I went is a national park near the shore. So I could play in the sea water. Also, homestay parents prepared some foods like sausage and fish&chips for us. Clean nature in Newzealand adds more happiness. Evenly, I could walk the street with bare foot. Peaceful moods in that moment is what I can\'t forget.
In Korea, there is merely no picnic culture. It\'s difficult to enjoy a picnic casually in countryside. There\'re lacks of infrastructure to enjoy the picnic. In case of Seoul, we can enjoy it. But it is different with what I experienced in Newzealand. I don\'t know whether my feeling is just because I\'m familliar with moods in here
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>> The picnics in New Zealand were the most memorable picnic experiences for me.
When I was sixteen, I had a opportunity to stay in Newzealand for two months.
>> When I was sixteen, I had the opportunity to stay in New Zealand for two months.
I did home stay in one Newzealand family at that time, and homestay parents took me to the picnic with two other famies.
>> I home stayed in one family in New Zealand at that time and my home stay parents took me to the picnic with two other families.
I was very happy because I had never went to the picnic for the moment.
>> I was very happy because I had never gone to a picnic for a while.
Where I went is a national park near the shore.
>> Where I went was a national park near the shore.
>> Or: I went to a national park near the shore.
>> Or: I went to a national park near the shore.
So I could play in the sea water.
>> CORRECT.
Also, homestay parents prepared some foods like sausage and fish&chips for us.
>> Also, the home stay parents prepared some foods like sausage, and fish and chips for us.
Clean nature in Newzealand adds more happiness.
>> The clean nature in New Zealand adds more happiness.
Evenly, I could walk the street with bare foot.
>> I could even walk on the street barefooted.
Peaceful moods in that moment is what I can\'t forget.
>> CORRECT.
In Korea, there is merely no picnic culture.
>> CORRECT.
It\'s difficult to enjoy a picnic casually in countryside.
>> It\'s difficult to enjoy a picnic casually in a countryside.
There\'re lacks of infrastructure to enjoy the picnic.
>> There is a lack of infrastructures to enjoy a picnic.
In case of Seoul, we can enjoy it. But it is different with what I experienced in New Zealand.
>> CORRECT.
I don\'t know whether my feeling is just because I\'m familliar with moods in here.
>> I don\'t know if I just feel this way because I\'m familiar with the moods here.
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