What were some of the embarrassing situations you had when you were a child?

2014-06-13 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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When I was child, I have a memory with my cousin. I was at the age of 5 and my cousin was 8 years old. He visited our home with uncle(his father). there was a doll which I like very much. It was my precious. the doll looked like a frog and It was able to pick my hand into the doll. when I grab my hand, It closed or opened it's mouse. and whenever open it's mouse, tongue of frog was split out and I was very happy when I was playing with that doll. but my cousin cut the tongue of frog doll. I was very embarrassed and I stomp the ground and cried. He and I are very close friend for now but at that time, I really coursed him. he excused what he did. but I cried until their leaving out our home. the day of tomorrow, My mother took a shop where I bought the frog doll but all frog doll was sold out. I was so sad. and even I am sad even now. but I love my cousin~~ !

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

What a lovely story. ^_^

You made me smile after reading your essay.

I suddenly remember my favorite doll.

Thank you for sharing this story to me.

I was able to know you more because of this.

Talk to you tomorrow. Good night.

Teacher Nina

 

When I was child, I have a memory with my cousin.

>> Did you mean: When I was a child, I had good memories with my cousin,
I was at the age of 5 and my cousin was 8 years old.

>> Correct!
He visited our home with uncle(his father).

>> He visited us with my uncle.

>> OR: He went to our house with my uncle.
there was a doll which I like very much. It was my precious.

>> There was a doll which I really like. It was precious.

>> OR: There was a doll which I really admire. It was precious to me. 
the doll looked like a frog and It was able to pick my hand into the doll.

>> Did you mean: The doll looked like a frog and I was able to pick it.
when I grab my hand, It closed or opened it\'s mouse.

>> Did you mean: When I grabbed it, the mouth opened and closed.
and whenever open it\'s mouse, tongue of frog was split out and I was very happy when I was playing with that doll.

>> And whenever its mouth is open, the tongue shows up. I was very happy when I was playing with that doll.

>> OR: Whenever its mouth is open, the tongue comes out. I was very happy when I played with the doll.
but my cousin cut the tongue of frog doll.

>> Correct! 

I was very embarrassed and I stomp the ground and cried.

>> Did you mean: I was very depressed, stamped the ground and cried.

He and I are very close friend for now but at that time, I really coursed him.

>> We are very close friends but at that time, I really cursed him.

he excused what he did. but I cried until their leaving out our home.

>> He asked for an apology for what he did. But I cried until they left our house.
the day of tomorrow, My mother took a shop where I bought the frog doll but all frog doll was sold out.

>> Did you mean: The following day, my mother took a shop where I bought the frog doll but it was sold out.

I was so sad. and even I am sad even now.

>> Did you mean: I am still sad until now because of what happened.
but I love my cousin~~ !

>> Correct! 

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