What will video games be like in the future?
학생이 쓴 원문
I believe it will become more real and diverse. A lot of tech companies try to develop graphics higher as much as reality, and we can experience 4D currently. They purpose to attract people using people\'s hormone; dopamine, However, if they want to attract the people\'s interests, it should be more and more sensational. Although the duration is sometimes inappropriate, to appeal is important. Current video games include aggressive and violent, but I don\'t think they will be better in the future. Many people already become familiar with existing games; therefore, they want to highly charge and sexualize content. For these circumstances, the government should enforce or limit the content in video games. To sum up, video games will have more realistic graphics in the future, and people can enjoy them. However, people should recognize the problems that can cause mental trouble and should find solutions.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jin!
You have a point. Well, proper guidance should be given to youngsters and minors who play these video games. We also have good games for learning that encourage children to study more and have fun. Keep on writing your opinion! ^^
~T. Maine
I believe it will become more real and diverse.
>>Correct.
A lot of tech companies
try to develop graphics higher as much as reality, and we can experience
4D currently.
>>Correct.
They purpose to attract people using people\'s hormone;
dopamine, However, if they want to attract the people\'s interests, it
should be more and more sensational.
>>Their purpose is to attract people using people\'s hormone, dopamine. However, if they want to attract the people\'s interests, it should be more and more sensational.
Although the duration is sometimes
inappropriate, to appeal is important.
>>Correct.
Current video games include
aggressive and violent, but I don\'t think they will be better in the
future.
>>Correct.
Many people already become familiar with existing games;
therefore, they want to highly charge and sexualize content.
>>Many people already become familiar with the existing games. Therefore, they want to highly charge it and make it sexual with its contents.
For these
circumstances, the government should enforce or limit the content in
video games.
>>For these circumstances, the government should enforce or limit the content of video games.
To sum up, video games will have more realistic graphics in
the future, and people can enjoy them.
>>Correct.
However, people should recognize
the problems that can cause mental trouble and should find solutions.
>>Correct.
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