What will you do if you don’t get this job?
학생이 쓴 원문
As disappointing as that sounds, I will choose to be optimistic since I am an entry-level employee. If I were not to get a position for this time, I would try another shot. Indeed, I would need to further develop myself with more training, experience, and certificates to enhance my qualification further. Since I long wished to work within the financial service sector to utilize my technical knowledge and client service experience, I would like to work within companies that provide clients with financial analysis and data with their software. In this way, I believe Bloomberg is the market leader where many financial professionals use the service to make profitable yet sustainable investment decisions. Accordingly, if I were not successful at this time, I would try again later by sharpening my skills and knowledge, which will allow me to be better suited for the industry and the position.
강사 첨삭
Thank you once again for this Aciel. Good luck with the interview tonight.
As disappointing as that sounds, I will choose to be optimistic since I am an entry-level employee.
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If I were not to get a position for this time, I would try another shot.
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>>> OR: If I were not to get a position for this time, I would try to give it another shot.
Indeed, I would need to further develop myself with more training, experience, and certificates to enhance my qualification further.
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Since I long wished to work within the financial service sector to utilize my technical knowledge and client service experience, I would like to work within companies that provide clients with financial analysis and data with their software.
>>> correct
In this way, I believe Bloomberg is the market leader where many financial professionals use the service to make profitable yet sustainable investment decisions.
>>> correct
Accordingly, if I were not successful at this time, I would try again later by sharpening my skills and knowledge, which will allow me to be better suited for the industry and the position.
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