What will you do if you were homeless?
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In fact, I don\'t want to understand the homeless people because I think they didn\'t put an effort into anything.
Of course, It is related to his or her parent\'s wealth but I think if we put an effort, we can overcome this poverty.
Many famous people like Michael Jackson overcame his poverty for himself.
It is a proof that if we strive for something, we can achieve that.
Therefore, If I am a homeless person, at first I will make a goal and I achieve it putting an effort everyday.
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Of course, It is related to his or her parent\'s wealth but I think if we put an effort, we can overcome this poverty.
Many famous people like Michael Jackson overcame his poverty for himself.
>> Many famous people overcome poverty by themselves just like Michael Jackson.
It is a proof that if we strive for something, we can achieve that.
In fact, I don\'t want to understand the homeless people because I think they didn\'t put an effort into anything.
>>CORRECT
>>CORRECT
Of course, It is related to his or her parent\'s wealth but I think if we put an effort, we can overcome this poverty.
>> Of course, it is related to his or her parent\'s wealth but I think if we put an effort, we can overcome poverty.
Many famous people like Michael Jackson overcame his poverty for himself.
>> Many famous people overcome poverty by themselves just like Michael Jackson.
It is a proof that if we strive for something, we can achieve that.
>>CORRECT
Therefore, If I am a homeless person, at first I will make a goal and I achieve it putting an effort everyday.
Therefore, If I am a homeless person, at first I will make a goal and I achieve it putting an effort everyday.
>> Therefore, if I am a homeless person, at first I will make a goal and I achieve it putting an effort everyday.
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