What worries you most about online security? Why?
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What worries me most is that my information is known to others. it is used for crime.
A few years ago, my face book was hacked. so, my information was known to others.
One of them texted X-colleage and ask him to send the money.
So, I revoked the membership.
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What worries you most about online security? Why?
>>What worries me most is that my information will be made known to others.
it is used for crime.
>>It\'s used in crime.
A few years ago, my face book was hacked.
>>A few years ago, my Facebook was hacked.
so, my information was known to others.
>>So my information became known to others.
>>So my information became known to others.
One of them texted X-colleage and ask him to send the money.
>>One of them texted my former colleague and asked him to send money.
So, I revoked the membership.
>>One of them texted my former colleague and asked him to send money.
So, I revoked the membership.
>>So, I deactivated my account.
What happened to your colleague was pretty scary! Did he send some money? What happened?
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