What worries you most about online security? Why?
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Few years ago, I watched a movie called Citizenfour. It was a movie from real story in American government. The story was that the American government surveillance personal life/privacy through computer connected by the online system. They not only checked the personal email, but also can monitor personal life through that person\'s own camera in the computer which was connected by online system. I also worries my privacy information stocked by the other person\'s, and be used illegally.
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What worries you most about online security? Why?
Few years ago, I watched a movie called Citizenfour.
>>A few years ago, I saw a movie called \"Citizenfour\".
It was a movie from real story in American government.
>>It was based on the true story of the U.S. government.
The story was that the American government surveillance personal life/privacy through computer connected by the online system.
>>The report said the U.S. government monitors personal life through computers connected to online systems.
They not only checked the personal email, but also can monitor personal life through that person\'s own camera in the computer which was connected by online system.
>>Not only have they checked their personal e-mails, they can monitor their personal lives through their own cameras on computers connected to online systems.
I also worries my privacy information stocked by the other person\'s, and be used illegally.
>>I also worry about storing my personal information and being used illegally.
I\'ve also seen that movie and was a huge issue. The documentary film really made many people erase and protect their personal information online.myself included.
That\'s why I use a pseudo name for my social accounts.
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