What would you do if you became the richest person on Earth?
학생이 쓴 원문
Just thinking of it makes me happy. However, at least, I know how more important it is to spend money well than to make much money. So I spent my uncontrollable glut of money on helping the poor stand up on their own feet. I offer free but best education to them so that they can get a good job which is the base that they can stand up financially. And I incorporate a company that supplies jobs for those who are too old to get a job for their livelihoods. And I loan money to those suffering from financial problems with very low interest. However, I don’t like spending money like water on reckless loans. Only those who with a strong desire to stand up again can borrow money because I don’t want to get them into a moral hazard. In short, I want to make the world a better place with my richness, let alone take care of my family financially.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for your answer, Steve. It\'s nice to see you take advantage of the incredulous amount of money by doing your best to help others who might be in need. :)
~T.Harmony <3
>> CORRECT!
However, at least, I know how more important it is to spend money well than to make much money.
>> CORRECT!
So I spent my uncontrollable glut of money on helping the poor stand up on their own feet.
>> CORRECT!
I offer free but best education to them so that they can get a good job which is the base that they can stand up financially.
>> ...which is the base/foundation for them to financially stand on their own feet.
And I incorporate a company that supplies jobs for those who are too old to get a job for their livelihoods.
>> CORRECT!
And I loan money to those suffering from financial problems with very low interest.
>> CORRECT!
However, I don’t like spending money like water on reckless loans.
>> CORRECT!
Only those who with a strong desire to stand up again can borrow money because I don’t want to get them into a moral hazard.
>> Only those with a strong desire to stand up again...
In short, I want to make the world a better place with my richness, let alone take care of my family financially.
>> CORRECT!
OR>> richness -> wealth
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