What would you do if you could suddenly speak English?
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1. If I suddenly speak English well, I will talk a lot for world peace.
>>If I could suddenly speak English well, I will talk a lot about world peace.
2. In today\'s era, peace is lacking due to conflicts and problems between nations and peoples despite the world becoming united by innovations and advances in technology.
>>CORRECT
OR>>In this generation, peace is lacking due to conflicts and problems between nations and peoples despite the world becoming united by technology innovations and advances.
3. Peace is possible when we truly understand and accept each other.
>>CORRECT
>>Peace is done when there is true understanding and acceptance.
4. In order for everyone to live apart from their greed and selfishness, we need communication and empathy.
>>CORRECT
OR>>In order for everyone to live without greed and selfishness, we need communication and empathy.
5. So I will try to talk a lot with different and multicultural people in English to reduce our differences.
>>CORRECT
OR>>So, I will try to communicate a lot with various and multicultural people in English to lessen our differences.
6. Beyond the gap by going to understanding and tolerance, we will be able to work together to solve our common problems, such as the Earth\'s environmental problems.
>>Going beyond the gap by understanding and tolerance, we will be able to work together to solve our common problems, such as the Earth\'s environmental problems.
Truly, communication is one of the keys for world peace.
Nice essay.Keep it up.
-T. Melody^^
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