What would you do if you lost your phone?
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Dear [Name],
I had a experience to lost my mobile phone twice times. I called my phone at the public telephone and I tried to connect my phone. but I couldn\'t. so I called my phone company and I asked them to stop my phone. I was very embarrous situation at that time. I can not anything without mobil phone, these days, mobile phone give a servie for banking system, so I can pay with my phone, and send a money to someone when I buy some goods. I can\'t imagine my life without mobil phone. Samsung advertised their phone with following sentance \" Smart phone will change your life and you can find everything with it.\"
What do you think about this sentance?
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I had a experience to lost my mobile phone twice times.
>> I experienced losing my mobile phone twice.
I called my phone at the public telephone and I tried to connect my phone. but I couldn\'t.
>> I called my phone using the public telephone but I couldn\'t reach it.
so I called my phone company and I asked them to stop my phone.
>> So I called the customer service of my phone and asked them to make my phone stop functioning.
I was very embarrous situation at that time.
>> I was very embarrassed at that time.
I can not anything without mobil phone,
>> I can\'t do anything without a mobile phone.
these days, mobile phone give a servie for banking system, so I can pay with my phone,
>> These days, mobile phones provide banking services so I can pay almost anything with my phone.
and send a money to someone when I buy some goods.
>> And, I can send money to the seller when I buy some goods.
I can\'t imagine my life without mobil phone.
>> CORRECT; spelling of \"MOBILE\".
Samsung advertised their phone with following sentance \" Smart phone will change your life and you can find everything with it.\"
>> Samsung advertised their phone with the use of this statement.
>> CORRECT; spelling of \"SENTENCE\"
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