What would you do if you noticed a crime being committed?

2021-02-08 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I don’t know the situation what a crime is committed. So, I will just suppose it that I saw a situation related to pickpocket If I saw a situation related to pickpocket, at first I contact a police. Even though I can help that person who has been pickpocketed, but it has risk and it is more helpful to contact police. In fact, even if we saw a situation of crime, there are many people who don’t help each other these days. So, the activity that we contact a police to help them is more helpful than we don’t any act. In conclusion, if I noticed a crime being committed, immediately I contact a police.

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I don’t know the situation what a crime is committed.
>> I wouldn\'t know if a crime is being committed. 

So, I will just suppose it that I saw a situation related to pickpocket
>>So, I will just suppose that I saw a situation related to pickpocket

If I saw a situation related to pickpocket, at first I contact a police.
>>CORRECT

Even though I can help that person who has been pickpocketed, but it has risk and it is more helpful to contact police.
>> Even if I can help that person who has been pickpocketed, the risk is still high when I call the police.

In fact, even if we saw a situation of crime, there are many people who don’t help each other these days.
>> In fact, even if we see a crime being committed, there are still some people who wouldn\'t help. 

So, the activity that we contact a police to help them is more helpful than we don’t any act.
>> Contacting the police would be more helpful than doing nothing. 

In conclusion, if I noticed a crime being committed, immediately I contact a police.
>>In conclusion, if I notice a crime being committed, I will immediately contact the  police.

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