What would you do if you were the president in your country?

2020-04-08 · 첨삭 강사 Tricia

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Dear [Name], When I was child, I had a dream to be a president. I thought, my child time, the president was the King. So I can do everything what I want and I can take all in my country. It was very childish thinking Now, I think, the president is very important position to make a good country. A fault decision that the president make can be a dangerous situation for my country. So I don\'t want to be a president. Only to be a general person.

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Hello [이름]! :)

I appreciate your effort in writing a composition.
Have a wonderful day. :)

- Tricia


Dear [Name],

When I was child, I had a dream to be a president.
>> When I was a child, I dreamed to be a president.

I thought, my child time, the president was the King.
>> When I was a child, I thought the president is a King.

So I can do everything what I want and I can take all in my country.
>> So I can do everything that I want and I can take all in my country.

It was very childish thinking
>> CORRECT!

Now, I think, the president is very important position to make a good country.
>> Now, I think, being a president is a very important position to make a good country.

A fault decision that the president make can be a dangerous situation for my country.
>> A fault decision that the president makes can be a dangerous situation for my country.

So I don\'t want to be a president. Only to be a general person.
>> So I don\'t want to be a president. I just want to be a regular person.

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