What would you do if your parents opposed the dream you have in life?
학생이 쓴 원문
Actually I haven\'t thought about this situation so far, I would not bend my will. My parents always said to me that I am stubborn child. I totally agree with that. I think, opinion of the parents regarding my future need to be respected because they have nurtured me. But it doesn\'t necessarily mean that parents have a right to decide their children\'s life. The person who live my life is me. Therefore, even if I obey my parent\'s advice, it will be concluded to blaming the parents. Parent\'s can\'t totally take a responsibility of their children\'s life.
Of course, I will consider the level of the opposition. If my parents threaten me to cut off the financial supports, I will keep going. Because I can try to earn my own money even it would make me weary. In fact, I already decide to become financially independent after I graduate the university. But, if they opposite exceedingly hard to the extent that they threated me to cut off the relationship as a family , I can\'t sure my decision.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! Thank you for this. I hope your parents would still support you with your chosen dream whatever it may be.
- T. Beth
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Actually I haven\'t thought about this situation so far, I would not bend my will. >>> correct
>>> OR: Actually I haven\'t thought about this situation so far. I would always insist on what I want.
My parents always said to me that I am stubborn child.
>>> My parents always said to me that I am a stubborn child.
I totally agree with that.
>>> correct
I think, opinion of the parents regarding my future need to be respected because they have nurtured me.
>>> correct
>>> OR: I think my parents opinion regarding my future needs to be respected because they have nurtured me.
But it doesn\'t necessarily mean that parents have a right to decide their children\'s life.
>>> But it doesn\'t necessarily mean that parents have the right to decide on their children\'s life.
The person who live my life is me.
>>> The person who lives my life is me.
Therefore, even if I obey my parent\'s advice, it will be concluded to blaming the parents.
>>> OR: Therefore, even if I obey my parent\'s advice, it will result to blaming the parents.
Parent\'s can\'t totally take a responsibility of their children\'s life.
>>> correct
Of course, I will consider the level of the opposition.
Of course, I will consider the level of the opposition.
>>> correct
If my parents threaten me to cut off the financial supports, I will keep going.
>>> correct
Because I can try to earn my own money even it would make me weary.
>>> Because I can try to earn my own money even it would makes me weary.
In fact, I already decide to become financially independent after I graduate the university.
>>> In fact, I have already decided to become financially independent after I graduate from the university.
But, if they opposite exceedingly hard to the extent that they threated me to cut off the relationship as a family , I can\'t sure my decision.
>>> However, if they oppose exceedingly hard to the extent that they threaten me to cut off the relationship as a family, I can\'t be sure about my decision.
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