What would you invent? If you are scientist.
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Dear Teacher Melody.
Today I did not hear \'you say boss\' and \'read sentance\'
I am looking foward to your kindly understand.
If I am a scientist, I make a personal doctor machine.
If someone is sick, that will be diagnosis patient situation and give a solution to patient.
Thesedays we have a big database for patient. So if it is possible to match a disease by person machine. Inthe future, I will make them.
See you^^♡
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1. If I am a scientist, I make a personal doctor machine.
>>If I am a scientist, I will make a personal doctor machine.
2. If someone is sick, that will be diagnosis patient situation and give a solution to patient.
>>If someone is sick, that can diagnose the patient and give a cure to the patient.
3. Thesedays we have a big database for patient.
>>These days, we have a big database for patients.
4. So if it is possible to match a disease by person machine.
>>So, if it is possible to diagnose a disease by doctor machine then, it would be a great invention.
5. Inthe future, I will make them.
>> In the future, I will make it.
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Good sentences.
- T. Melody ^^
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