What would you invent if you were a scientist? Why?

2018-11-19 · 첨삭 강사 Shelly

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Modern century people are living very convenient life style. Wealthy families life are unbelievable easy and comfortable in Korea. For example, inside house the most systems are touching one button that everything it works. Vacummming, cooking, door on and off, watching TV,curtains, car, laundry, dish wash . Everybody knows Sam Sung electronic company in Korea. The Sam Sung made so many amazing items. I am t[이름]kful all over the world many scientists. Generations to generations many scientists efforts and their hard work paid off. Especially a Nobel prize is a amazing too. It c[이름]ged on earth many ways. If I am inventing now specific transportation above the street. Many countries got traffic issues. It is a great idea also people love it. Many people are saving energy, time, also better air qualities. If I describe my item looks like hot air balloon style.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, [이름]nah!


You did well in doing your homework. T[이름]k you for sharing your thoughts and ideas on your homework. I hope you had a blessed weekend. See you later !


-Teacher Shelly-


Modern century people are living very convenient life style.

>>> Modern century people are now living a very convenient lifestyle.

Wealthy families life are unbelievable easy and comfortable in Korea.

>>> Wealthy families are unbelievably living an easy and comfortable life in Korea.
 For example, inside house the most systems are touching one button that everything it works.

>>> For example, inside the house, most system are now operating with a touch of one button.
 Vacummming, cooking, door on and off, watching TV,curtains, car, laundry, dish wash .

>>>Vacuuming, cooking, opening, and closing of doors, watching TV, curtains, cars, laundry, washing of dishes are some of the examples.
 Everybody knows Sam Sung electronic company in Korea.

>>>Everybody knows Samsung electronics company in Korea.

The Sam Sung made so many amazing items.

>>> Samsung made many amazing items. 
 I am t[이름]kful all over the world many scientists.

>>> I am t[이름]kful for all the scientists around the world.

 Generations to generations many scientists efforts and their hard work paid off.

>>> From one generation to another, many scientists made efforts and their hard work paid off.

Especially a Nobel prize is a amazing too.

>>> Most especially the people who won Noble prizes were amazing.

 It c[이름]ged on earth many ways.

>>> It c[이름]ged the earth in so many ways.
 If I am inventing now specific transportation above the street.

>>> If I were to invent something, I would invent a specific transportation above the street.

 Many countries got traffic issues.

>>> Many countries have traffic issues.
 It is a great idea also people love it.

>>> It is a great idea and people will love it.

Many people are saving energy, time, also better air qualities.
>>> Many people are saving energy, time and they also want a better quality of air. 

If I describe my item looks like hot air balloon style.

>>> If I were to describe the item it would look like a hot air balloon.

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