What would you like to accomplish in your life?

2019-07-26 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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I want to achieve my goal. That\'s to be a good interpreter. But I give up being the one. Because I have no enough time , I\'m getting old , I have to work and I should take care of my daughters. What I want to accomplish as being a home maker is to make my family have the high level of happiness and search for dream and make it come true.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

Thank you so much!

Have an awesome Friday and a great weekend!

Talk to you later!

Teacher ELLY.

What would you like to accomplish in your life?

I want to achieve my goal.

CORRECT!

or>>I would like to be successful in achieving my goal.

That\'s to be a good interpreter.

CORRECT!

or>>And it\'s to be an approved interpreter.

But I give up being the one. Because I have no enough time,

>>But I give up being one, because I don’t have enough time.

I\'m getting old.

CORRECT!

or>>I\'m piling up more years on my age.

I have to work and I should take care of my daughters.

CORRECT!

or>>I need to be doing my work and at the same time, I have to look after my daughters.

What I want to accomplish as being a home maker is to make my family have the high level of happiness and search for dream and make it come true.

>>What I want to accomplish as a home maker is to help my family have the highest form of happiness, to guide them find their dreams and make them come true.

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