What would you like to change about the education system of your country?

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Most Korean think the education system of our country is terrible. 

>>> Most Koreans think that the education system of our country is terrible. 

I think we have very good public education structure.

>>> I think we have a very good public education structure.

If all students study things that is taught by school without private tutoring, everybody will go to the university.

>>> Correct!

Korean parents send their children a lot of institute such as piano, martial arts, soccer, and ballet after school, because children have to spend their time at home without guardian.

>>> Korean parents send their children to a lot of institutes such as piano, martial arts, soccer, and ballet after school, because children will be left home without guardian.

Furthermore, parents think their children would be behind at school if they didn\'t have private classes.
>>> Correct! 

We all agree that Korean educational system is focused on root learning, so everyone would like to change our system.

>> We all agree that Korean educational system is focused on the root learning, so everyone would like to change our system.

However, parents want their children to enter the top university in Korea.

>>> Correct!

It looks like that having a private classes is essential and private teacher forced students to memorize certain facts, the date of special events and word of english.

>>> It looks like having private classes are essential, and private teachers are forcing students to memorize certain facts, the date of special events and some English words. 

It doesn\'t help students to be creative and motivate.

>>> It doesn\'t help students to be creative and be motivated.