What would you like to give up so that you could have more free time? Discuss in 3 to 5 sentences.
학생이 쓴 원문
What would you like to give up so that you could have more free time? Discuss in 3 to 5 sentences.
I would give up to watching youtube for my free time. Some people think that watching youtube is the doing when they have free times. But I think that watching youtube can\'t give to me a enough filling to rest. Because of that, I abandon watching youtube in my free time for rest qulity to be better.
강사 첨삭
Hey, Karl. I was encouraged to read your essay. I have to admit it is not easy for me to abandon watching YouTube. It has been a part of my daily life.^^ Thank you for sharing your thoughts and experience on the topic. I would love to hear what is your alternative to YouTube. See you in class. ~Jane c\",)
I would give up to watching youtube for my free time.
>> I would give up watching YouTube in my free time.
Some people think that watching youtube is the doing when they have free times.
>> Some people think that watching YouTube is something they have to do in their free time.
But I think that watching youtube can\'t give to me a enough filling to rest.
>> But I think that watching YouTube cannot give me enough to feel rested.
Because of that, I abandon watching youtube in my free time for rest qulity to be better.
>> Because of that, I abandoned watching YouTube in my free time to have a better quality rest.
I would give up to watching youtube for my free time.
>> I would give up watching YouTube in my free time.
Some people think that watching youtube is the doing when they have free times.
>> Some people think that watching YouTube is something they have to do in their free time.
But I think that watching youtube can\'t give to me a enough filling to rest.
>> But I think that watching YouTube cannot give me enough to feel rested.
Because of that, I abandon watching youtube in my free time for rest qulity to be better.
>> Because of that, I abandoned watching YouTube in my free time to have a better quality rest.
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