What would you like to invent if you become an inventor?
학생이 쓴 원문
First, I would like to invent a machine that can make food constantly.
There are many people who can’t eat enough in the world.
I have donated my money to help with them but I can’t help many people.
Therefore, by making the machine that can make food ceaselessly, I would like to make a society that hasn’t poor population.
Second, I would like to invent a machine that can wash my face.
I’m lazy to wash when I get home from drink.
I think this machine can be bought by people from all around world.
강사 첨삭
Both machines you mentioned sound amazing. :)
If it were made into reality, I\'d buy both!
Thank you for sharing. ^^
~t. Ally
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First, I would like to invent a machine that can make food constantly.
>> CORRECT!
There are many people who can’t eat enough in the world.
>> CORRECT!
I have donated my money to help with them but I can’t help many people.
>> CORRECT!
Therefore, by making the machine that can make food ceaselessly, I would like to make a society that hasn’t poor population.
>> Therefore, by making a machine that can make food ceaselessly, I would like to make a society that doesn\'t have poverty.
Second, I would like to invent a machine that can wash my face.
>> CORRECT!
I’m lazy to wash when I get home from drink.
>> I get too lazy to wash my face whenever I get home from a drink.
I think this machine can be bought by people from all around world.
>> I think this machine can be bought by people from all around the world.
>> CORRECT!
There are many people who can’t eat enough in the world.
>> CORRECT!
I have donated my money to help with them but I can’t help many people.
>> CORRECT!
Therefore, by making the machine that can make food ceaselessly, I would like to make a society that hasn’t poor population.
>> Therefore, by making a machine that can make food ceaselessly, I would like to make a society that doesn\'t have poverty.
Second, I would like to invent a machine that can wash my face.
>> CORRECT!
I’m lazy to wash when I get home from drink.
>> I get too lazy to wash my face whenever I get home from a drink.
I think this machine can be bought by people from all around world.
>> I think this machine can be bought by people from all around the world.
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