What would you like to receive on your next birthday?

2022-06-30 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

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Birthday is only once a year. So birthday is special and meaningful for everyone no matter how old they are. On every birthday, we receive presents or give presents to our beloved ones. One of the reasons why we’re longing for our birthdays could be presents for birthday. Even while I am writing about birthday present, I am wondering what will be for my birthday gifts next year. I think birthday is a good chance to receive special gifts from mom and dad. This year, I received a doll for my birthday present. Now I have a list of many things to receive for next year’s birthday presents that I need to be more discreet to choose present for my birthday. For example, I want to receive bag, shoes, books and clothes and you name it. Anyway, birthday makes my heart pound. And I can’t wait until next birthday.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Rana! 

Oh, I guess you are already looking forward to your next birthday. Thank you for sharing!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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Birthday is only once a year. 
>> Correct! 
So birthday is special and meaningful for everyone no matter how old they are. 
>> So a birthday is special and meaningful for everyone, no matter how old they are. 
On every birthday, we receive presents or give presents to our beloved ones. 
>> Correct! 
One of the reasons why we’re longing for our birthdays could be presents for birthday. 
>> One of the reasons why we’re longing for our birthdays could be the presents for the birthday. 
Even while I am writing about birthday present, I am wondering what will be for my birthday gifts next year.
>> Correct! 
I think birthday is a good chance to receive special gifts from mom and dad.
>> I think a birthday is a good chance to receive special gifts from mom and dad.

This year, I received a doll for my birthday present. 
>> Correct! 
Now I have a list of many things to receive for next year’s birthday presents that I need to be more discreet to choose present for my birthday. 
>> Correct! 
For example, I want to receive bag, shoes, books and clothes and you name it.
>> Correct! 

Anyway, birthday makes my heart pound. And I can’t wait until next birthday.
>> Correct! 

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