What would you say is the key to living a long and healthy life? Please explain your answer
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I think it need multiple effort to living a long and healthy life.
First, for living a long and healthy life, we have to eat good. It can make our body strong.
Second, we need to make a effort to do exercise . It can improve our body function.
Third, for living a long and healthy life, we have to think good. It can release our stressful life. Most of time, the stress make our body get illness.
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What would you say is the key to living a long and healthy life? Please explain your answer.
I think it need multiple effort to living a long and healthy life.
>>I think it takes a lot of effort to live a long and healthy life.
First, for living a long and healthy life, we have to eat good.
>>First, in order to live a long and healthy life, we have to eat good food.
It can make our body strong.
>>It can make our bodies strong.
Second, we need to make a effort to do exercise .
>>Second, we need to make an effort to exercise.
It can improve our body function.
>>It can improve our physical function.
Third, for living a long and healthy life, we have to think good.
>>Third, to live a long and healthy life, we have to think good ideas.
It can release our stressful life.
>>It can release stressful things in our life.
Most of time, the stress make our body get illness.
>>Most of the time, stress makes us ill.
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