When are you in need of cheering up?
학생이 쓴 원문
I need to cheer up when I am exhausted. When I was work, sometimes I felt exhausted. Because I was wife, mom and office worker. I had a lot of have to do things. I was not machine, so I needed some rest. But I was not enough time.
I met my friends last Monday. We told that do you want to go back to yours young. I said that I don\'t want, now I am very good, I don\'t need take care of kids and I don\'t need to work. Even if I am older better than, l feel very happy. I think that I am no more need cheer up.
강사 첨삭
Good morning, Ms. [Name]!
Thank you for this!
Everyone needs a person to cheer them up and if we cannot find one, go infornt of the mirror and talk to ourself ( I do that).
Have a ncie day!
Aki~
I need to cheer up when I am exhausted.
>>> CORRECT!
When I was work, sometimes I felt exhausted. Because I was wife, mom and office worker. I had a lot of have to do things.
>>> When I was working, sometimes I felt exhausted because I was a wife, mom, and office worker. I had a lot of things to do.
I was not machine, so I needed some rest. But I was not enough time.
>>> I was not a machine, so I needed some rest, but I did not have enough time.
I met my friends last Monday. We told that do you want to go back to yours young.
>>> I met my friends last Monday and they told me if I want to go back to the way when I was young.
I said that I don\'t want, now I am very good, I don\'t need take care of kids and I don\'t need to work.
>>> I said that I don\'t want, I am very good now and I don\'t need to take care of kids so I don\'t need to work.
Even if I am older better than, l feel very happy. I think that I am no more need cheer up.
>>> Even if I am older than, l feel very happy. I think that I no longer need to cheer up.
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