When are you usually busy?

2018-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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I’m a salesperson. Whenever our new product is launched, I have a lot of works to do. First of all, I should learn about all the features of the new device from the education manager and spend much time studying the new product myself. because the product has a complex algorithm. After the education, I prepare for the presentation about the new device and then give a presentation to our costomers who are doctors. If the costomers are satisfied with the product, they usually use more our product than competitor's

강사 첨삭

Hi there Sir [이름]~! Good morning~! ^^ Enjoy your Tuesday! See you~!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

I’m a salesperson.

>>>CORRECT

Whenever our new product is launched, I have a lot of works to do.

>>>CORRECT

First of all, I should learn about all the features of the new device from the education manager and spend much time studying the new product myself because the product has a complex algorithm.

>>>CORRECT
After the education, I prepare for the presentation about the new device and then give a presentation to our costomers who are doctors.

>>>After the studies, I prepare for the presentation about the new device and then give a presentation to our customers who are doctors.
If the costomers are satisfied with the product, they usually use more our product than competitor\'s.

>>> If the customers are satisfied with the product, they usually use more of the product than that of the competitor\'s.

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