When did you get your first cell phone?
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I got my first cell phone, when I was an university student.
I was very excited to have my own mobile phone for free.
Even though I had to join their service plan for 2 years mandatorily.
There were not many variation of cell phones in that time.
But I was able to have cute, shiny and compact one.
and I used it for more than one year and went to Taiwan for studing.
When I came back to Korea, I continuously used it the rest of few months.
As the technology of communications developed, I had another cell phone
better to get the signal in everywhere, even underground.
But the new one didn't look as cute as previous one.I didn't like it so much.
Now I have my 4th smart phone which has multiple functions such as web surfing, listening to mp3 as well as watching TV.
It looks cool, so that I cherish it all the time.
The worst thing to have this cell phone is its bills once in a month.
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T. Faye
I got my first cell phone, when I was an university student.
>> I got my first cell phone when I was a university student. I was very excited to have my own mobile phone for free.
>> Correct.Even though I had to join their service plan for 2 years mandatorily.
>> Correct.There were not many variation of cell phones in that time.
>> There were not many variations of cell phones during that time. But I was able to have cute, shiny and compact one.
>> But I was able to have a cute, shiny and compact one.and I used it for more than one year and went to Taiwan for studing.
>> And I used it for more than one year and then I went to Taiwan for studying.When I came back to Korea, I continuously used it the rest of few months.
>> When I came back to Korea,I continuously used it for the rest of a few months.As the technology of communications developed, I had another cell phone better to get the signal in everywhere, even underground.
>> As the technology of communications developed,I had another cell phone, it was better because it has signal everywhere, even underground. But the new one didn\'t look as cute as previous one.
>> But the new one didn't look as cute as the previous one.
I didn\'t like it so much.
>> Correct.Now I have my 4th smart phone which has multiple functions such as web surfing, listening to mp3 as well as watching TV.
>> Correct.It looks cool, so that I cherish it all the time.
>> It looks cool, so I cherish it all the time.The worst thing to have this cell phone is its bills once in a month.
>> The worst about thing having this cell phone is the bills coming every month.
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