When do you prefer having a family gathering?

2021-06-30 · 첨삭 강사 Maine

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I want to go to the vacation with my nuclear family in summer and winter. When I was elementary school student, we often went trip anywhere. Among the experiences, I have loved to play in water. I\'m memorable I traveled some island in domestic or other country. We went abroad to join vacation annually. They are amazing experience. I can\'t forget to eye-contact with the fishes during snorkeling, I can\'t forget the row tuna\'s taste on the boat on the sea. I can\'t forget the emerald color water when I\'m in the sea. The vacation in abroad had different mood. It can\'t explain through word. I love the romantic mood. Now that I was grown adult, I can\'t go vacation abroad with all family members, because my parent have different trip preference. We even have hard time to go to the domestic vacation. I still try to go to the sea or water park with friends. I hope I have this vacation with my family members as many as possible.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Thanks for this.  Keep on writing. :)


-T. Maine   


I want to go to the vacation with my nuclear family in summer and winter.

>>I want to have a vacation with my nuclear family in summer and winter.
 When I was elementary school student, we often went trip anywhere.

>>When I was an elementary school student, we used to travel anywhere.
 Among the experiences, I have loved to play in water.

>>Among these experiences, I have loved to play in winter.
 I\'m memorable I traveled some island in domestic or other country.

>>It\'s a  memorable experience  when I travel to a domestic or international island.
 We went abroad to join vacation annually.

>>We went abroad annually to join some vacation.
 They are amazing experience. 

>>They are amazing experiences.
 I can\'t forget to eye-contact with the fishes during snorkeling,

>>I can\'t forget an eye-to-eye contact with some fish during snorkeling.
 I can\'t forget the row tuna\'s taste on the boat on the sea.

>>I can\'t forget the taste of raw tuna while we were on the boat.
 I can\'t forget the emerald color water when I\'m in the sea.

>>I can\'t forget the emerald color of the sea.
 The vacation in abroad had different mood. It can\'t explain through word. I love the romantic mood.

>>My vacation abroad gave me a different mood. It\'s unexplainable.  I love the romantic mood.
 Now that I was grown adult, I can\'t go vacation abroad with all family members, because my parent have different trip preference.

>>Now that I am an adult, I can\'t go abroad with all my family members because my parents have different preferences in traveling.
 We even have hard time to go to the domestic vacation.

>>We even have a hard time where to travel domestically.
 I still try to go to the sea or water park with friends.

>>I still go to the beach or the water park with my friends.
 I hope I have this vacation with my family members as many as possible.

>>I hope I have much time to spend my vacation with my family.

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