when I become angry
학생이 쓴 원문
The time that l become angry<blow up>
1.When my sister annoys me
2.When mum tells me that I can not ride bikes
3.When I have got lots of homewok to do
4. I faught with my sister and mum blame just me
When I was angry, I cry because it`s unfair.
My dad usually gets really angry when my mum tells him something he couldn`t do right now.
My mum gets angry when I do something silly.
WHEN DO YOU BECOME ANGRY?? AND WHY???
강사 첨삭
Hi there Min!:)
Happy Tuesday dear!
I\'m so glad that you made time to do the homework that I gave. I\'m really impressed by how good you\'re English command is. As you can see, I only did some minor modifications such as capital letters, punctuations, and the likes. You\'re composition is already good so keep it up and I\'m sure you\'ll do better next time.
You asked when and why I get angry. Well, just like you, I get angry when I feel that things aren\'t fair or unjust. Also, I tend to lose my patience when my kids ignore my instructions thrice in a row:) ^.^ I\'m a mom too so I think I can relate to your mom\'s situation. So I hope you\'ll listen more to her and give a hand if you can. And since you\'re older, sometimes you need to yield to your \"dongsaeng\". Be a role model to your younger sister, can you do that?^___^:)
~Teacher Mayleen
The time that l become angry<blow up>
>> The reasons why I get angry:
1.When my sister annoys me
>> 1. when my sister annoys me;
2.When mum tells me that I can not ride bikes
>> 2. when my mom tells me I can\'t ride bikes;
3.When I have got lots of homewok to do
>> 3. when I have lots of homework to do;
4. I faught with my sister and mum blame just me
>> 4. and, when I fight with my sister and my mom just blames me.
When I was angry, I cry because it`s unfair.
>> When I\'m angry, I cry because I feel that it\'s unfair.
My dad usually gets really angry when my mum tells him something he couldn`t do right now.
>> My dad usually gets angry when my mom tells him to do something he can\'t accomplish at the moment.
My mum gets angry when I do something silly.
>> My mom gets angry when I do something silly.
WHEN DO YOU BECOME ANGRY?? AND WHY???
>> WHEN DO YOU GET ANGRY? WHY?
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