When I decided a important thing, What did you do and why did you do?

2020-03-05 · 첨삭 강사 Melody

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Dear [Name], Three years ago, I had a bad situition at my company. After promotion director of my company colleague, he want to leave company for me. I think he thought me as competitor. so I left company at that time. My age was in my late 40 years old. So it was very difficult to get a job again. But I thought, it was unhappy to keep the job and broken my pride of career. So I decide to leave company and I hoped my wife undersood me. my wife said, most of all keeping health was very important, took a time for me. It was very difficult time but now I have a chance to enter a global company as a sales director.

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1. Three years ago, I had a bad situition at my company.
>>Three years ago, I had a bad situation at my company.

2. After promotion director of my company colleague, he want to leave company for me.
>>After a promotion as a director of my colleague, he wanted to leave the company for me.

3. I think he thought me as competitor.
>>I think he thought me as a competitor.

4. so I left company at that time.
>>So, I left the company at that time.

5. My age was in my late 40 years old.
>>I was in my late 40s.

6.  So it was very difficult to get a job again.
>>So, it was very difficult to get a job again.

7.  But I thought, it was unhappy to keep the job and broken my pride of career.
>>But I thought, I was unhappy to keep the job and I could not keep my pride of career.

8.  So I decide to leave company and I hoped my wife undersood me.
>>So, I decided to leave the company and I hoped my wife understood me.

9. my wife said, most of all keeping health was very important, took a time for me.
>>My wife said, \"Most of all, keeping your health is very important\", she took time for me.

10.It was very difficult time but now I have a chance to enter a global company as a sales director. 
>>It was a very difficult time but now, I have a chance to enter a global company as a sales director. 

Very good sentences.
I\'m glad you\'re in a better company now.

- T. Melody ^^

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