when I get angry

I get angry when: My brother annoys me, Mom yells at me, My brother farts in my room When I'm hungry, No one listens to me, When mom get chatty and noisy, My brother blames me for everything, I can't watch 'Barbie' on my iPad, When my dad farts and it really stinks, When I can't eat crisps, My brother yells at me for everything even if it wasn't my fault.

Hi there Emma! I was surprised to see your composition. How can you be so good?!^___^ But then, I\'ve made some minor modifications such as capital letter and punctuation marks. You actually did so well and I\'m grateful that you accomplished your homework. I can see that you easily gets angry and annoyed which is understandable at your age. But I hope you and your brother will have a better relationship in the future:) Do you like Barbie that much? I think you\'re just as pretty as her. Keep smiling my dear. Avoid frowning, you\'ll age faster^_^ Have a great evening!:)   ~Teacher Mayleen~     I get angry when: >> CORRECT OR >> The times I get angry are when: My brother annoys me, >> my brother annoys me; Mom yells at me, >> my mom yells at me; My brother farts in my room >> my brother farts in my room; When I\'m hungry, >> I\'m hungry; Don\'t repeat the word WHEN which is already in your first sentence. It\'ll be redundant.:) No one listens to me, >> no one listens to me; When mom get chatty and noisy, >> me mom nags and I think it\'s sounds noisy; My brother blames me for everything, >> my brother blames me for everything; I can\'t watch \'Barbie\' on my iPad, >> I can\'t watch Barbie on my iPad; When my dad farts and it really stinks, >> my dad farts and it really stinks; When I can\'t eat crisps, >> I can\'t eat crisps; My brother yells at me for everything even if it wasn\'t my fault. >> and, when my brother yells at me for everything even if it\'s not my fault.