When I was happy
학생이 쓴 원문
I was happiest when I came up with a proper novel for the first time. It was the first time I let the world know what I wanted. I enjoyed sharpening my sweaty sentences.
강사 첨삭
I was happiest when I came up with a proper novel for the first time.
>> I was happiest when I wrote my first novel.
It was the first time I let the world know what I wanted.
>> It was the first time I expressed what I wanted to say to the world.
I enjoyed sharpening my sweaty sentences.
>> I enjoyed carefully improving my sentences.
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