When I was young,

When I was young, many girls gave chocolate to me. Past is the past. As I grew up, there were no one who cares me. and I became not to care how many chocolates I got. I met carolyn about one and half years ago, she gave me chocolate. For the first time I have ever got, hand-made chocolate. It was delicious. My mother also liked it. It was my best memory about Valentine day.

Good evening [이름]! Thank you for sending this in tonight. Wow! What a sweet love story! I think Carolyn is really good at cooking and baking, am I right? Are you planning to run a business in the future? I am so happy read your composition. ^^ Now, I know why you really love Carolyn. She is so blessed to have you. It is because you are always proud of her. See you tomorrow. Have a great night! Teacher Nina   When I was young, many girls gave chocolate to me. >> When I was young, many girls gave me chocolates. Past is the past.>> Past is past. As I grew up, there were no one who cares me. >> As I grew up, no one cared for me. >> OR: As I became older, no one cared about me. and I became not to care how many chocolates I got.>> Did you mean: And I started not to mind how many chocolates I got during Valentine\'s Day. I met carolyn about one and half years ago, >> I met Carolyn about one and a half year ago.she gave me chocolate. >> She gave me a chocolate.For the first time I have ever got, hand-made chocolate. >> Did you mean: For the first time, I got a homemade chocolate.It was delicious. >> Correct! My mother also liked it. >> Correct! It was my best memory about Valentine day. >> It was the best memory I have about Valentine\'s Day. >> OR: It was the most memorable Valentine\'s Day I had.