when one of your values showed up positively in your life or how it influenced decisions that you ma
학생이 쓴 원문
The value effects my life the most is “Love of learning”.
Learning helps me improve my abilities and gives me more opportunities.
When I started to work in a corporate loan department, I found many of my customers have exporting or importing business. I thought knowing about international trade and foreign exchange would help me understanding my costumers better. So I invested lots of my free time to study those and acquired some certification related even though it was not directly connected my work.
Learning something I don’t know always makes me fulling. Moreover this learning brought me a precious chance to work in China. My company launched the new business in China and my experiences made me a competitive person for the new position.
Not even for that, what I have learned in China for 5 years made my old dream come true – stuying MBA
There is a saying I like the most, “the more you know, the more you see”
I am sure I can see more after my learning in Kelley
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! Great job in expressing your thoughts through writing and it\'s also a great practice for you. ^_^
When I started to work in a corporate loan department, I found many of my customers have exporting or importing business.
>>> When I started to work in a corporate loan department, I found many of my customers are into exporting or importing businesses.
I thought knowing about international trade and foreign exchange would help me understanding my costumers better.
>>> I thought knowing about international trade and foreign exchange would help me understand my costumers better.
So I invested lots of my free time to study those and acquired some certification related even though it was not directly connected my work.
>>>So I invested lots of my free time studying them and acquired some related certificates even though it was not directly connected with my work.
Learning something I don’t know always makes me fulling.
>>> Learning something I don’t know always made me feel fulfilled.
Moreover this learning brought me a precious chance to work in China.
>>> Moreover, this learning brought me a precious chance to work in China.
My company launched the new business in China and my experiences made me a competitive person for the new position.
>>> My company launched a new branch in China and my experiences made me a competitive person for the new position.
Not even for that, what I have learned in China for 5 years made my old dream come true – stuying MBA
>>>Not even for that, what I have learned in China for 5 years made my long-time dream come true to study MBA.
There is a saying I like the most, “the more you know, the more you see”
>>> There is a saying I like the most, “The more you know, the more you see”
I am sure I can see more after my learning in Kelley
>>> I am sure that I can see more after studying in Kelley.
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