When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country. O

2020-04-01 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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I think people must follow the law they move to. If they don\'t follow the new customs, they will have a lot of difficulties while they are staying there. Some countries have a strict culture, for example, women have to hide their hair with scarf in Arab countries. Women in Saudi Arabia are prohibited to drive a car by the law. I can\'t understand some cultures because it is totally different with my culture. Even though, it has a different custom, people have to respect other country\'s culture. In the history, we can find the reason why each country has their unique culture. For these reason, I think we must respect other countries culture.

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Hi there Sir [이름]~! Thanks for doing your essay~! ^^ Enjoy the rest of the day!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think people must follow the law they move to.
>>> I think people must follow the law where they move.
 If they don\'t follow the new customs, they will have a lot of difficulties while they are staying there. 
>>> If they don\'t follow the country\'s customs, they will have a lot of difficulties while they are staying there. 
Some countries have a strict culture, for example, women have to hide their hair with scarf in Arab countries.
>>> CORRECT
 Women in Saudi Arabia are prohibited to drive a car by the law. 
>>>  Women in Saudi Arabia are prohibited to drive a car by law. 
I can\'t understand some cultures because it is totally different with my culture.
>>> CORRECT
Even though, it has a different custom, people have to respect other country\'s culture.
>>> Even though we have different customs, people have to respect other country\'s culture.
 In the history, we can find the reason why each country has their unique culture.
>>> CORRECT
 For these reason, I think we must respect other countries culture.
>>> CORRECT

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