When was the happiest day of your life?

2022-01-11 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

학생이 쓴 원문

There were so many happy days in my life, but I think the happiest day was when I got discharged from the army. all men who was born in Korea have to do the mandatory service in the army for one and half years. I thought that It is miserable because there is no one who want to go to the army, and also someone got injured while doing some works there. I felt I was so fortunate that I got discharged without getting hurt. When I met my family again at home on the day I got discharged, my family threw a celebration party for me, and I was so happy to think that I had finished one of the hardest things of my life.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! 

Congratulations on finishing your service in the military and glad to know that you are safe and sound! ^_^ I guess your family is really happy to see you again.

Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day ahead! 

~T. Roanne ^_^
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1. There were so many happy days in my life, but I think the happiest day was when I got discharged from the army.
>> Correct! 
2. all men who was born in Korea have to do the mandatory service in the army for one and half years.
>> All men who was born in Korea have to do the mandatory service in the army for one and a half year.
3. I thought that It is miserable because there is no one who want to go to the army, and also someone got injured while doing some works there. 
>> Correct!
4. I felt I was so fortunate that I got discharged without getting hurt.
>> Correct! 
5. When I met my family again at home on the day I got discharged, my family threw a celebration party for me, and I was so happy to think that I had finished one of the hardest things of my life.
>> Correct! 

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