When was the last time that you had a wonderful time? Write about it.
학생이 쓴 원문
I had a wonderful time while traveling another country because it is very fun and amazing.
And I went to grandfather\'s house. I talked with grandfather and playing omok games with Yale.
One more, I\'m happy when I swimming in the pool.
강사 첨삭
Good Thursday evening, Jimmy!
I\'m sending you back your revised essay. Please don\'t forget to take a look at the corrections.
Cheers,
Jean~~
When was the last time that you had a wonderful time? Write about it.
I had a wonderful time while traveling another country because it is very fun and amazing.
>> I had a wonderful time while traveling to another country because it was very fun and amazing.
And I went to grandfather\'s house.
>> Another time was when I went to my grandfather\'s house.
I talked with grandfather and playing omok games with Yale.
>> I talked with my grandfather and played omok games with Yale.
One more, I\'m happy when I swimming in the pool.
>> Also, I\'m happy when I swim in the pool.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.