When was the last time the weather destroyed one of your plans?

2014-03-03 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

We see that the weather changes almost everyday. Some days are hot and uncomfortable. Some days are cold and chilly. The changes in the weather and climate have a tremendous affect on our daily lives and business. For instance, it was warm, clear and sunny today and I saw many people who enjoyed outdoor activities such as jogging, biking, hiking, playing soccer, etc. For the last few days, people who were outside wore masks due to the fine duct and put on warmer (and more) clothing due to the chilly weather. Your business is significantly affected by the weather as well. You see less people who go to restaurants and shopping malls in rainy days, thus creating low sales. The weather can impact your scheduling. Due to the unpredicted heavy rain, I had to change the entire plan for the technician skill contest that was supposed to take place outside two years ago. We needed to secure a space inside the building to move all the test vehicles in and to complete the event as scheduled.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!^.^
Thank you for sharing your opinions about the topic.
I somewhat agree with what you had mentioned. I also had some bad experiences about the topic.
Maybe we can talk about this during our class.
Anyhow, please read the corrections I made and the alternative sentence patterns that you can use, too.
If you have questions, feel free to ask me.^.^
~~T. Nina~~

We see that the weather changes almost everyday.
>> Correct.
Some days are hot and uncomfortable.
>> Correct.
>> OR: We can experience uncomfortable hot weather.
Some days are cold and chilly.
>> Correct.
>> OR: Some days are hot and uncomfortable weather and the other days are cold and chilly.
The changes in the weather and climate have a tremendous affect on our daily lives and business.
>> The changes in the weather and climate have tremendous effects on our daily lives and businesses.
For instance, it was warm, clear and sunny today and I saw many people who enjoyed outdoor activities such as jogging, biking, hiking, playing soccer, etc.
>> For instance, it is warm, clear and sunny day and I see many people enjoying outdoor activities such as jogging, biking, hiking, playing soccer, etc.
For the last few days, people who were outside wore masks due to the fine duct and put on warmer (and more) clothing due to the chilly weather.
>> However, for the last few days/past few days, these people wore masks due to the fine duct (Did you mean \"dust\"?) and put on warmer and more clothing due to the chilly weather.
Your business is significantly affected by the weather as well.
>> Correct.
You see less people who go to restaurants and shopping malls in rainy days, thus creating low sales.
>> Correct.
>> OR: We see fewer people going to restaurants and shopping malls during rainy days, thus creating/having low profit.
The weather can impact your scheduling.
>> Correct.
>> OR: The weather can give an impact on your schedule, too.
Due to the unpredicted heavy rain, I had to change the entire plan for the technician skill contest that was supposed to take place outside two years ago.
>> Correct.
We needed to secure a space inside the building to move all the test vehicles in and to complete the event as scheduled.
>> Correct.

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