When was the last time you achieved a goal? How did you feel?
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My last achieved goal was getting a second prize at a writing contest in university. Students had to submit writings which relate with their experience while they did some activity in university. I wrote my experience about teaching freshmen through few months. I was really exhausted and stressful because I tried too hard teaching them. During this time, I learned many things about how to handle students when I give a lesson for them. For this reason, I wanted other people also know my experience and I wrote a writing about this I also thought I want to get a prize because of my t[이름]l. As a result, I got a second prize, and I was really moved. I thought it was worth to challenge and it made me more confident.
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Congratulation for winning the Second Place [이름]!
You must be very happy during that time :)
My last achieved goal was getting a second prize at a writing contest in university.
>>> The last goal I achieved was to get second place in the university writing contest.
Students had to submit writings which relate with their experience while they did some activity in university.
>>> Students had to submit articles related to their experiences while in college.
I wrote my experience about teaching freshmen through few months.
>>> I wrote about my experience of teaching freshmen for a few months.
I was really exhausted and stressful because I tried too hard teaching them.
>>> CORRECT!
During this time, I learned many things about how to handle students when I give a lesson for them.
>>> CORRECT!
For this reason, I wanted other people also know my experience and I wrote a writing about this I also thought I want to get a prize because of my t[이름]l.
>>> For this reason, I also wanted other people to know my experience to win the prize.
As a result, I got a second prize, and I was really moved.
>>> As a result, I received the second place award and I was really touched.
I thought it was worth to challenge and it made me more confident
>>> I thought it was worth the challenge, so I gained more confidence.
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