When was the last time you helped someone? What did you do?

2021-01-13 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

학생이 쓴 원문

The last time I helped someone was when I did a volunteer work for the young students. I was enrolled in the volunteer club which teaches elementary school English and math. Through the club, I met a 4th grader student and she wanted to learn math from me. So, I bought a book for her and made a weekly test for her. At first, she had a hard time trying to figure out math problems and do all the assignments I gave to her. However, she soon got used to solving math problems easily and her math skills quickly advanced. As a mentor, I felt very proud of her that she followed the difficult course. One year later, on the last day of our mentoring volunteer programs, she made me happy by getting a perfect score on her math test. Also, she gave me a letter and a small gift. I was so touched that she liked my classes and received a lot of help from me. Her letter made me feel proud of myself for what I did and made me decided to do more volunteer works.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]hee! I admire you for that kind act of yours. I hope you continue to touch other people\'s lives. -Faith-
The last time I helped someone was when I did a volunteer work for the young students. 
>> CORRECT
I was enrolled in the volunteer club which teaches elementary school English and math. 
>> I was enrolled in the volunteer club which taught elementary school English and math subjects. 
Through the club, I met a 4th grader student and she wanted to learn math from me. 
>>Through the club, I met a fourth grader and she wanted to learn math from me. 
So, I bought a book for her and made a weekly test for her. 
>> So, I bought a book for her and made a weekly test for her as well. 
At first, she had a hard time trying to figure out math problems and do all the assignments I gave to her. 
>> CORRECT
OR: At first, she struggled to solve math problems and do all the assignments I gave to her. 
However, she soon got used to solving math problems easily and her math skills quickly advanced. 
>> CORRECT
As a mentor, I felt very proud of her that she followed the difficult course. 
>> As a mentor, I felt very proud of her that she had a better understanding about the course.
One year later, on the last day of our mentoring volunteer programs, she made me happy by getting a perfect score on her math test. 
>> One year later, on the last day of our mentoring volunteer program, she made me happy by getting a perfect score on her math test. 
Also, she gave me a letter and a small gift. 
>> CORRECT 
I was so touched that she liked my classes and received a lot of help from me. 
>> CORRECT
OR: I was so touched that she appreciated my classes and my help for her.
Her letter made me feel proud of myself for what I did and made me decided to do more volunteer works.
>> Her letter made me feel proud of myself for what I did and made me decide to do more volunteer works.

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