When was the proudest moment of your life?
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The proudest moment of my life is when I did a debate on transhumanism in front of over fifty people at my English cram school.My voice was small and I had little confidence before the debate. I was so humble that I was undermining myself. I was always thinking of my weaknesses and I think I was actually making some. For example, when I got a good score on the test, I just attributed this good achievement to "coincidence" when I should have complimented myself for that hard work. I thought to be modest was much much better than to be selfish, and it is still true, but I should have noticed that being modest didn't mean underestimate myself and my work. Anyway, that shy and quite I decided to challenge myself, so I worked my best on preparing for my debate. Days and days I went to the academy and practiced with my peers. After 2 months of hardworking, I was finally on stage, and I couldn't be more proud of myself for speaking out in front of so many people and revealing my true self.
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Hi [이름]!
happy Tuesday!^^
Wow! Your story is actually inspiring especially for those who lack self-confidence even though they\'re skilled or talented.
You can be a role model for people who can\'t voice out what\'s on their mind due to insecurity or hesitation.
With your attitude, I\'m certain that you will go far.
Never say never as they say. You\'ll regret it more if yoo didn\'t even try.^_^
Thank you for this composition. I\'ve read it well.:)
=T. Mayleen=
The proudest moment of my life is when I did a debate on transhumanism in front of over fifty people at my English cram school.
>> The proudest moment of my life was when I joined a debate on transhumanism in front of over fifty people at my English cram school.
My voice was small and I had little confidence before the debate.
>> My voice was thin and I had little confidence before the debate.
I was so humble that I was undermining myself.
>> I didn;t trust my skills enough so I was undermining myself.
I was always thinking of my weaknesses and I think I was actually making some.
>> CORRECT
For example, when I got a good score on the test, I just attributed this good achievement to \"coincidence\" when I should have complimented myself for that hard work.
>> For example, when I got a good score on the test, I just said it was out of luck when I should be complimenting myself for my hard work.
I thought to be modest was much much better than to be selfish, and it is still true, but I should have noticed that being modest didn\'t mean underestimate myself and my work.
>> I thought to be modest was much better than to be self-centered and it\'s still true. I should have known that being modest doesn\'t mean undermining myself and my work.
Anyway, that shy and quite I decided to challenge myself, so I worked my best on preparing for my debate.
>> Anyway, despite being shy and quiet, I decided to challenge myself so I worked my best in preparing for my debate.
Days and days I went to the academy and practiced with my peers.
>> I went to the academy and practiced with my peers for days.
After 2 months of hardworking, I was finally on stage, and I couldn\'t be more proud of myself for speaking out in front of so many people and revealing my true self.
>> After 2 months of hard work, I was finally on stage. I couldn\'t be more proud of myself for speaking out what\'s on my mind in front of so many people.
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