When you are tasked to do a project, do you collect ideas from other people? Explain in 5 sentences.

2019-04-30 · 첨삭 강사 Gracelyn

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When working, I generally organize the first things myselfs if there is no upper pressure from my boss. The main reason for this is that I tend to be esaily affected by other person who gvies me the idea. Therefore, I have tried to build up my own structure first and get feedback from colleagues on what parts of my first draft seems to be revised to make it batter. Sometimes, I found myself blaming someone in my mind without knowing when something affected by someone\'s idea goes wrong. To prevent this bad habiture, Doing everything myself is my first priority.

강사 첨삭

Hello Tk,

Your eagerness to learn English is well appreciated. Keep doing your best and I will do my best to teach you.

Here are some of my corrections.


When working, I generally organize the first things myselfs if there is no upper pressure from my boss.

>> When I’m working, I generally organize myself first if there is no pressure from my boss.

The main reason for this is that I tend to be esaily affected by other person who gvies me the idea.

>> The main reason for this is I tend to be easily affected by others who give me the idea.

Therefore, I have tried to build up my own structure first and get feedback from colleagues on what parts of my first draft seems to be revised to make it batter.

>> Therefore, I have tried to build up my own idea and I will get some feedback from my colleagues on what parts of my draft will be revised to make it better.

Sometimes, I found myself blaming someone in my mind without knowing when something affected by someone\'s idea goes wrong.

>> Sometimes, I found myself blaming someone in my mind without knowing someone is affected by his/her wrong ideas.

To prevent this bad habiture, Doing everything myself is my first priority.

>> To prevent this bad habit, I’m doing everything for myself as my first priority.

      

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