When you think of peace, what image do you think of? Please describe it

2015-03-02 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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As people have different thaught, when it comes to peace, people draw different image of peace. When I think of peace, I can come up with image like this. First of all, the sun is shining through a cloudless sky. There is a quiet and calm place. There are a lot of trees on the place. And then leaves of the trees sometimes swing back and forth every moment the breeze blows. In addition, diverse flowers are growing under the trees and small unknown little birds fly around. Sometimes they sing with very enjoyful voice. I lay on the place with my eye close. I can feel every thing around me; the warm sunlight, the movement of the trees and sing of little birds. I can say that this is the very image of peace, although others have different one about peace. At first, I don't know what I should write. But I seem to be peaceful involuntarily while writing this essay. Someday, I want to spend my rest time such a peaceful place.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon Miss [이름]! Thank you for sharing your image of peace. It is indeed relaxing to be in a quiet and calm place. I hope that you cna find time to have your own peace.^^ ~Kelly^^ As people have different thaught, when it comes to peace, people draw different image of peace. >> As people have different thoughts when it comes to peace, people draw a different image of it. When I think of peace, I can come up with image like this. >> When I think of peace, I come up with an image like this. First of all, the sun is shining through a cloudless sky. >> Correct. There is a quiet and calm place. >> Correct. >> or: I picture a quiet and calm place. There are a lot of trees on the place. >> Correct. And then leaves of the trees sometimes swing back and forth every moment the breeze blows. >> And then, the leaves of the trees sometimes swing back and forth every moment the breeze blows. In addition, diverse flowers are growing under the trees and small unknown little birds fly around. >> Correct. Sometimes they sing with very enjoyful voice. >>Sometimes they sing with very joyful voice. I lay on the place with my eye close. >> I lay on the place with my eyes closed.  I can feel every thing around me; the warm sunlight, the movement of the trees and sing of little birds. >> I can feel every thing around me; the warm sunlight, the movement of the trees and the song of little birds. I can say that this is the very image of peace, although others have different one about peace.>> I can say that this is my own image of peace, although others have a different one. At first, I didn\'t know what I should write. >> Correct. But I seem to be peaceful involuntarily while writing this essay. >> But, I feel at peace while writing this essay. Someday, I want to spend my rest time such a peaceful place. >> Someday, I want to spend my rest time in such a peaceful place.  

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